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題目問的是能否從失敗中學到有益的東西？作者在第一段講了幾句相關的話后過渡到正題，提出了自己的中心論點即value is not found only in success。

4分作文： Some people would say that something that is not successful does not have any value. I would have to disagree with this statement. Sometimes, things that are not successful still have some value. For example, the Columbia space shuttle and the Vietnam War were not successful, but they had value. Thus, it is true that something not successful can still have value. For instance, the Columbia disaster. Columbia was destroyed in an accident when the shuttle tried to re-enter the atmosphere. This accident was a horrible failure and many people were very upset by it. The value, though, comes from the new way in which we now look at things. Because of Columbia, the space program now know what is wrong. Hopefully, they will change it. Vietnam is also an example of something not successful. We went to Vietnam in an attempt to get rid of communists. Thewar went on for a while, but we were not able to win. Many soldiers were killed and the public were very angry about the whole thing. Soon there were many protests across the country and college students especially became active against the war. By the time the war was ended the people were very upset with their country. These two examples show that something not successful can still have value. As we have seen, both Columbia and the Vietnam War were not successful. Yet, we got something of value out of them. 【點評】 開始段落把中心觀點講出來了，并且也有thesis statement。

文章的拼寫錯誤很多，全部都是口語化的東西，雖然SAT沒有要求考生把作文寫得像academic essay（學術論文）一樣，但要是一個閱卷者在批閱一份作文時候，感覺像是在聽這個作者面對面地講話，他能給這個作文很高的評價嗎？而且，整個文章的句式死板單調，顯得很稚氣，不像是個即將進入大學學習的中學生的作品。

所以我們在此建議，正文部分就舉兩個例子。

但是，成功的人畢竟是少數。

筆者的一名學生寫作功底并不是很強，臨考前背了幾個例子，自己加以改動發揮，居然都用上了，還拿到了11分。

最后，作者的語法基礎很扎實，通篇沒有語法錯誤（當然，即使有點小的語法錯誤也不會影響該篇作文獲得滿分），而且展示了一定的遣詞造句能力。

這幾年的真題不外乎都是關于名人、成功、失敗的教訓、人際關系、新技術發展對人類的影響，等等。

可以說，對Prompt的內容你不看都可以，但你必須深刻把握Assignment的核心。

可以說，段落的重點很得當。

稍顯遺憾的是，結尾的后半部分內容有些不足，其實可以再多寫一兩句，以免給閱卷者留下草草結尾的感覺。

develops no viable point of view on the issue, or provides little or no evidence to support its position

在結束段落，作者先總結了自己的核心觀點，并指出以上列舉的兩個例子可以證明自己的觀點，到這里，結尾段落的上半部分就算結束了。

但不管怎樣，開始段落該有的東西還是有了，一個閱卷者想要找的東西在第一段都提到了。

這么說不是要學生去背誦，要真那樣被閱卷者發現，就徹底完了，不僅會得0分，搞不好還會弄出個學術剽竊的麻煩。

閱卷委員會的給分為該篇作文的最后得分。

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