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4分作文： Some people would say that something that is not successful does not have any value. I would have to disagree with this statement. Sometimes, things that are not successful still have some value. For example, the Columbia space shuttle and the Vietnam War were not successful, but they had value. Thus, it is true that something not successful can still have value. For instance, the Columbia disaster. Columbia was destroyed in an accident when the shuttle tried to re-enter the atmosphere. This accident was a horrible failure and many people were very upset by it. The value, though, comes from the new way in which we now look at things. Because of Columbia, the space program now know what is wrong. Hopefully, they will change it. Vietnam is also an example of something not successful. We went to Vietnam in an attempt to get rid of communists. Thewar went on for a while, but we were not able to win. Many soldiers were killed and the public were very angry about the whole thing. Soon there were many protests across the country and college students especially became active against the war. By the time the war was ended the people were very upset with their country. These two examples show that something not successful can still have value. As we have seen, both Columbia and the Vietnam War were not successful. Yet, we got something of value out of them. 【點評】 開始段落把中心觀點講出來了，并且也有thesis statement。

An essay in this category demonstrates developing mastery, and is marked by ONE OR MORE of the following weaknesses:

如果非要舉知道。

比如剛才的題目，在第一段作者的中心論點是value is not only found in success，而在結束段，就最好不要寫成In conclusion, value is not only found in success，這樣寫太單調了點。

作為開始段落，最少要3到5句話才可以構成一個有效的段落，但許多學生往往一兩句就匆匆結束，起碼從字數上看就不是個成功的開始段落。

An essay in this category demonstrates adequate mastery, although it will have lapses in quality. A typical essay

總體而言，該文采用narrative的方式，但是在開始段和結尾，作者采用的是議論方式，闡述自己的觀點。

所以我認為失敗是成功的基礎，對成功是有幫助的。

但是也要注意，你最多只能寫兩頁，千萬不要說我寫滿了，但還沒有寫完，然后舉手問考官再要一張紙。

從正面來看，作者還是了解了這篇作文的目的，對作文題的要求還是把握住了，有自己的觀點，并且知道用例子來支持自己的觀點。

要對整個例子進行深度挖掘，正文部分往往寫成narrative（敘述）的形式。

全文只舉了哥倫比亞飛機失事的一個例子，沒有對該例進行深度挖掘。

從語法方面看，個別地方外還算通順，但和滿分及5分的作文相比，作者的遣詞造句能力和駕馭句式的能力顯得很稚嫩。

或者說，英雄是否注定有一天會被人們遺忘？本題目可以歸納為是否存在永恒的英雄。

displays very little facility in the use of language, using very limited vocabulary or incorrect word choice

Let's consider Julius Caesar, a hero in his own time but regarded, thanks mainly to Shakespeare's play, as a man with mortal failings: vain, superstitious and arrogant. He can no longer be thought of as a hero, but just a man who came to prominence for his actions at a certain point in history. He has his place in the history of the Western world and his face on ancient coins, but scarcely fits our need for a hero for all times whom we can revere.

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你也可以這么開始這篇文章，比如成功的人受到公眾的羨慕，有鮮花掌聲，金錢地位，但失敗的人受到公眾的唾棄，甚至是親人的蔑視等等。

這對SAT作文是同樣有效的。

當然，你要了他也不會給你。

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